Show don't tell!
Hello everyone!
This morning,Habitat 17 did a writing sample about showing instead of telling.We had to do feelings.You had to write down how the were feeling,very simply(tell)and you also had to write down a more exciting paragraph(Show.)
Here is my writing sample,the show part.Let's see if you can find out how Amber is feeling!
Show:Amber’s face brightened. Her smile broadened. A lot. Her eyes shimmered with happiness. She had tears in her eyes. Her mood immediately changed. She raised her hands to her mouth in happiness. She started to jump feverishly. Her hand loosened and they just relaxed. But they were still a little tight with excitement. Her voice was high with excitement and she had the slightest tint of relief in her voice. She was the most happy she had ever been.
Can you guess how Amber's feeling?
Write down your answer in the comments below!
From,
Maya.
Is she feeling happy & exciteddarling ? :)
ReplyDeleteNo!
DeleteBut it is another word for REALLY happy and excited!
DeleteWhy did you have to do me? (A.K.A Amber) But anyway, It is really cool and I think she might be Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious (JK) but really, she might be delighted (or something like that).
ReplyDeleteEstatic
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